雅思寫作對于考生來說有一定難度,需要拿到高分的話,我們需要過硬的寫作水平。那么怎么寫出高分的作文呢?接下來小編以一個實(shí)際的例子來為大家講解高分作文是什么樣的,我們可以學(xué)習(xí)一下,具體來看看典型的例題示范,希望各位考生能從中有所收獲。

 典型例題示范:

 下面是我們在備考雅思過程中經(jīng)?？吹降膸讉€與文化類相關(guān)的題目,包括 museum,old buildings,international travel 和 languages 等問題。

 ·Some people claim that government should fund museums and art galleries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 ·Should old buildings be destroyed and replaced with modern ones?

 ·Do the problems brought by international travel outweigh the advantages?

 ·Several languages are dying out every year. Some people do not think it is important and say that our life will be simpler with fewer languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 在學(xué)生的作文中我們經(jīng)常會看到這樣的句子或段落:

 e.g.1: Museums should be built by the government, because the museum is an important part of our culture. So the government should spend money constructing museums.

 e.g.2: International travels can bring many benefits to us. To begin with, we can know more about foreign cultures, which can broaden our horizons. In addition, traveling can promote the development of local economy.

 e.g.3: Dying out of several languages is harmful for the culture, because

 language is an important part of culture.

 e.g.4: Destroying old buildings is harmful for the local culture, because these buildings are an important part of local culture.

 看過這幾個段落,大家不難發(fā)現(xiàn)其中存在的一個共同問題:觀點(diǎn)擴(kuò)充不夠,論證不充分, 導(dǎo)致內(nèi)容空洞,思維跳躍,沒有說服力。這是因?yàn)橛行W(xué)生確實(shí)想到了某些觀點(diǎn),但是每每寫到這個觀點(diǎn)時,便覺得這是理所當(dāng)然,沒有必要再去解釋。這就是跳躍式思維在寫作中一個比較典型的體現(xiàn)。除此之外,導(dǎo)致這種思維出現(xiàn)的另外一個原因就是覺得沒有什么可寫,也就是素材積累的問題了,即素材的缺乏導(dǎo)致了內(nèi)容的空洞。其實(shí),想要解決上述的問題,并不難, 只要通過簡單的三部曲即可。現(xiàn)在,我們就來看一下,如何進(jìn)行這三部曲。

 具體三部曲:

 Step 1:定位名詞,即句子中的抽象名詞或概括名詞

 回顧上述幾個句子,雖然有很多名詞,如 museum,travel,language 和 old buildings, 但是比較抽象或者是概括的名詞只有 culture。

 Step 2:具體化,即找到概括名詞在生活中的具體體現(xiàn)

 例如: 在 Wikipedia, 我們可以查到,Culture is the social behavior and norms found in human societies. Some aspects of human behavior, social practices such as culture, expressive forms such as art, music, dance, ritual, and religion, and technologies such as tool usage, cooking, shelter, and clothing are said to be cultural universals, found in all human societies. 所以, 當(dāng)我們看到 museum 或 old buildings 時,我們可以具體到 art works,some rituals,some original tools;當(dāng)我們看到 travel 時,我們可以具體到 cooking,shelter,clothing 等等。有了這樣的積累之后,在我們寫到 widen one's horizon 或 be harmful for culture 時,我們便能夠繼續(xù)寫下去。

 Step 3:引導(dǎo)詞 + 具體化內(nèi)容

 引出具體化內(nèi)容的副詞或是詞組有很多,比如 specifically,to be specific 等。

 e.g.1: International traveling should be encouraged greatly since it can widen

 our views. Specifically, we can see lots of traditional arts while traveling to other countries, which can improve our understanding of locals' lifestyle, their customs, beliefs, and traditions, helping us relate to the their culture past, enlarging our horizons.

 e.g.2: Museums deserve financial support from the government, since they are

 always attached to local culture. Specifically, we can see lots of traditional arts in museums, which can deepen our understanding of ancestors' past, their customs, beliefs, and traditions, helping us relate to the our past, enhancing our sense of belonging.

 e.g.3: Dying out of certain languages can bring potential negative influence on preserving certain culture, since language is one of the indispensable aspects of a culture. Specifically, via using or learning a language, we can expose ourselves to lots of traditional arts, literature works, which can deepen our understanding of ancestors' past, their customs, beliefs, and traditions, helping us relate to the our past, enhancing our sense of belonging.

 通過以上段落,不難發(fā)現(xiàn)多數(shù)文化類題目在寫作過程中,我們可以將 culture 具體成 lifestyle,customs,beliefs,traditional arts 或 literature works 等,將這些內(nèi)容用于 expand horizons 的論證中就可以在一定程度上避免內(nèi)容空洞,思維跳躍的問題。了解完這些之后,親愛的烤鴨們會發(fā)現(xiàn)文章內(nèi)容確實(shí)充實(shí)不少,但是組成一段還是不夠,所以一般情況下我們還需要 point,例如下面這段:

 International travels can bring many benefits to us. To begin with, we can know more about foreign cultures, which can broaden our horizons. In addition, traveling can promote the development of local economy.

 我們上面已經(jīng)補(bǔ)充了關(guān)于 broaden our horizons 的具體內(nèi)容,接下來我們再來看一下另外一個 point。很明顯,另外的一個 point 中的抽象或概括名詞是 economy。An economy is an area of the production, distribution, or trade, and consumption of goods and services by different agents(from Wikipedia),所以我們也很容易能夠想到被旅游業(yè)所推動的經(jīng)濟(jì)增長點(diǎn),如 accommodation,catering,retailing 等。所以關(guān)于 promote local economy,我們可以做出以下擴(kuò)展:

 Traveling can promote the development of local economy. Specifically,as tourists flock in, the extra demand for food, accommodation and other goods or services will boost related industries, generating more job opportunities for local residents and creating revenues for the government.

 這樣需要具體化的名詞在雅思寫作過程中我們還會遇到很多,如 happiness,job satisfaction 等,大家可以通過查詢 Wikipedia 或相關(guān)工具書獲得。

 以上是小編為大家?guī)淼摹霸鯓訉懗鲅潘几叻肿魑?”相關(guān)內(nèi)容,無論是在備考的哪個階段,考生一定要注意練習(xí)和總結(jié),預(yù)祝各位考生能順利在考試中收獲滿意成績。

  廣州雅思英語學(xué)校成立于1999年,現(xiàn)任校長是有中國雅思“教父”之稱的中國社會科學(xué)院博士、中國雅思教育開拓者,資深留學(xué)教育專家萬昌明博士。廣州雅思英語學(xué)校是國內(nèi)最早的專業(yè)雅思學(xué)校之一,也是英語IELTS考試中文“雅思”命名的首創(chuàng)者之一。十九年來, 廣州雅思英語學(xué)校秉承“教育以學(xué)生為本,以質(zhì)量為先”辦學(xué)宗旨,堅(jiān)持“知識、激情、勵志”的教學(xué)理念,發(fā)展成為華南乃至中國最大的雅思學(xué)校之一。